Photo: Silhouette of Woman
(haiku)
Vent doux caressant
corps brulant et bronzé
fraicheur délassée
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Brunante paisible
brise venant de l’océan
somnifère d’été
© Cheryl-Lynn 2014/069/11
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Tournesol dans un Jardin 
I like the coolness of the oceanbreeze … you have said it wonderful.
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Thank you, I do love the ocean scent and breeze.
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You’re welcome … your French haiku are beautiful …
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Super-doux, le premier, et si joliment sensuelle. La deuxième frais, léger. très jolie haïku. J’ai beaucoup aimé
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Ah bien, merci! C’est très gentil! il y a quelque chose de très sensuelle et mysterieuse des chaleurs d’été…
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Even without translation (yet)
I am sooo there…
🙂 Thank you.
Jules
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I hope I have done you justice 🙂
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Wow you did that fast!! Cool..by the way, .the word Brulant means feverish, flushed, hot…
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Ah, Google translated it to ‘peaceful’.
‘peaceful dusk allows…’
perhaps with the corrected definition this might be a better fit (I shall add it to my post):
steaming dusk along
with salt from the ocean
cook her summer sleep
cJP/davh
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Your translation is just fine, I was only referring to the first haiku when you refer to “burnt” body …it was flushed, hot or feverish..just helping you understand the nuance of the word Brulant…it literally means a burning body…so flushed or hot would have fit nicely, I think:)
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Thanks again 🙂
Maybe it is nap time for this ole’ gal. 😉
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Rest is good:) you did a splendid job by the way! I was just trying to explain nuances. Rest well.
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Nuance is everything, well almost everything in poetry 🙂
Thanks, Jules
So much for a nap, going exploring since hubby came home… We are west coast folks sort of visiting the east coast. Well he’s working most of the time, and me I’m chill’axin’ 🙂
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Enjoy…I’m closer to east coast, 6 hours from Maine
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Normally, well once I get home – I’m in SE, PA.
Not near the coast, but I’ve got a creek that borders my back yard. We probably have similar bird-friends.
I’m still on PA time which is about 11:30pm thought it is only 8:30pm now. So I am fading fast.
We did go to the ‘mountain’ and up one of the lesser slopes. Just enough to see the road but not clear as to just where the hotel is. Might not be close enough to the actual park as part of the mountain range is a cattle ranch. So I am tuckered out now! 🙂
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