I had spent a very brief visit with my family in Toronto last summer after a four-day retreat. I always look forward to the long ride returning home to Montreal. It gives me time to adjust to the change of places and reminisce of things I did, people I saw and the life I once had here. I had time to think of my new personal mantra I was given which I could practice for over four hours and how much a part of my heart is still in this city I once called home.
Settling by the window, I allowed the train to rock me like a lullaby…chug chug chug…eyes focused on the city we are crossing, up above on elevated tracks…I am on top of the world and once we are further out, buildings become scarce. Kilometres of meadows, farms and the occasional crossings in smaller villages flash by…my eyes begin to feel so very heavy. I am sitting on the opposite side I usually sit for Lake Ontario is on the other side. I will be noticing a different view on this trip.
I see fields and fields of tall grass as it is time for the first harvest of hay. As we sped by I saw stacked bales of hay each farmer displaying his own mark…some tight round bales, some bales shaped like huge barrels and some square blocks. From the train they looked like mounds of hay or straw plants or shrubs.
The loud echo of the train’s whistle at some crossings roused me and I admired the sky changing colours as the sun began to set…the man across from me gave in to the lullaby but I am still like a little child fighting sleep always, in the event I just might miss something.
rocking on steel rods
fields flashing on fast-forward
a man snores
© Tournesol ’14
Carpe Diem Ghost Writer, Hamish Gunn has asked us to write a Kikobun; this is writing about about a journey, or part of a journey or wander. The idea of it being about wandering and observing is very relevant.
I love travelling on trains, so I enjoyed reading this tale. Well done indeed.
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I love trains too…most of my childhood I traveled on trains to get to the city. I’m pleased you enjoyed this, Michael.
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This is great! Very in tune with the surroundings of your journey, and such a fun moment at the ending haiku. [applause!]
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{bowing} easier than a curtsy:) merci Paloma, merci bien:)
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😀
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It’s wonderful and conveys part of the charm of train travel. 🙂
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Ah thanks, glad you enjoyed it.
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Wonderful way to live the life of trains.. Even snoring men becomes important..
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I love to hear the sounds…the chatter, giggling, the video games and then suddenly silence, rumbling of the train and snoring…sort of like “lights out folks” our internal parent putting us to sleep:)
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I’m glad you enjoyed your train ride. (*smiles*)
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I usually do especially if no one sits next to me so I can stretch…long legs are made for first class
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I love train rides – you see things you dont see when you drive.
Happy New Year !!!
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So true, driving on a highway for 5 hours alone is boring, in a train it’s a treat even a bus is better…I sit on the 2nd floor way UP high:)
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Wonderful kikobun Cheryl Lynn … i like travelling by train …
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I find traveling Montreal Toronto is a 4 to 5 hour trek and flying is 1 hour but you have to get there early and airports are often out of the way that it comes to the same time but less expensive and more comfortable:)
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You capture that feeling of a train ride well here. It looks like a very fertile part of the world.
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Farms on one side and Lake Ontario on the other side…when I sit near the lake, I pretend it is the ocean and daydream:)
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It sounds like a very pleasant journey – train rides are great for daydreaming.
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Any movement offers me opportunities to daydream, walking, driving, sailing…:)
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Beautifully preented – you share a similar style in that respect to Suzanne and Jen, with text, haiku and photos interpersed. This was a real Kokobun, notes from a journey, carefully described, bringing moments alive and giving them depth. Enjoyed very much . I love trains.
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What a lovely compliment!! thank you, Hamish, your encouragement inspires me to write more and to be compared to Suzanne and Jen’s style, well, I`m doubly flattered as I admire their work. Happy New Year…I truly enjoy your stories on your various blogs!
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Well done … and now I know what a real kokobun is!!!
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I am not sure as I felt it was so similar to my haibun I usually write, but hey, thanks!
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