Haiku is a image of a moment in time, put on pause… examined, dissected and most important, felt. This was my moment in time when I got up this morning. My first day off for the weekend, like most people, a well needed rest in our long winters here.
golden glow
glistening charms melt
teardrops
I set that haiku aside for two hours and wrote another post and came back to edit it until I thought it “felt” like my moment. It did. Afterwards I decided to do a Troiku with this haiku which I learned at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai.
golden glow
blinding baby blues
mouse squeals
~
glistening charms melt
shallow puddles form,
strays lap
~
teardrops
softened by whispers
from heaven
© Tournesol ’15
Nicely done.
The ducks in my creek bring me many simple joyful moments 😉
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Lucky you!
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Beautifully done. Every moment is felt in your words. Great job. 🙂
-HA
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Thanks so much, HA. I’m glad you enjoyed it.
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Both versions were lovely, but that longer parts felt more tender for some reason.
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Interesting…the first part is the haiku and to form a troiku (the second section) you take each line of that haiku to create a new haiku …
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I feel like I should have known that because you’ve used this method before, but I honestly forgot.
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And I as well…I just finally got it right this week:) Thanks so much for reading and being such a great person in my WP life, kiddo, it means a lot.
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You’ve been great for me on here as well. (*smiles*)
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