pleasure tokens (haibun)

“But pleasures are like poppies spread, You seize the flower, it’s bloom is shed; Or, like the snow-fall in the river, A moment white, then melts forever.” Robert Burns …………Photo credits: Chris at The Muscleheaded Blog

I read this quote at The Muscleheaded Blog.  A lovely quote by none other than Robert Burns. What a nice segeway into Valentine’s Day, non?  Must one be in love or in a relationship at this time to be reminded of past loves, paramours and blissful pleasures of the past?  I don’t think so. And so I decided to write a Troiku  about those pleasure moments that are sometimes short-lived.  Now look deeply into that photo as you read into his thoughts:

© Chris at Muscleheaded Blog – Letters and Dreams


poppies spread
pleasure tokens prised
I shan’t forget

poppies spread
imprints a mark of love
and then it scars

pleasure tokens prised
precious moments revisits
blushing every time

I shan’t forget
tomorrows shall be laced,
those yesterdays

© Tournesol ’15

Quote & Photo credits: Chris at The Muscleheaded Blog

Troiku a Haiku form created by Chévrefeuille at Carpe Diem

Carpe Diem Haiku Kai – Poppies

When Georgia mentioned this was the theme at CP yesterday, I read the prompt, thought about writing another haiku (which I still may) but liked the theme of forgotten love rather than war in this troiku as well.

14 thoughts on “pleasure tokens (haibun)”

    1. thank you so much, Hamish, I am truly honoured by your kind words. Yes, I like this form, it is a wonderful way of developing those first 3 lines that are key of course. It is almost like telling a story (choka) but keeps the mood of the haiku and that “impression d’un seul moment”.

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