The challenge here is to write a troiku using a haiku, Chèvrefeuille has chosen for us written by Basho.
butterflies and birds
restlessly they rise up
a cloud of flowers
© Basho (Tr. Jane Reichhold)
butterflies and birds
wrestle cozy idleness – or,
nature’s bounty
restlessly they rise up
unfurled wings rousing wafts,
filled with grace
a cloud of flowers
beckon to be suckled
swell of sweet nectar
© Tournesol ’15
You have mastered this art form!!!
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I love this form indeed!! It makes me feel alive like playing hopscotch:)
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Bravo! This requires a standing ovation!
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I just saw this beautiful comment that oddly found itself in my spam folder. Merci, ma chère:)
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Oh darn .. which makes me think I should go rummaging around in the garbage … sigh.
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Yes, there are great finds in that bin sometimes 😉
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Ah yes, and I know it too.
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I always love your troiku. 🙂
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What a nice compliment, thank you, Celestine. I have been too busy to truly dedicate to writing as I like, so your words come at a perfect time, blessings! x
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Fascinating take on Basho’s poem a great troiku as always …
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Thanks, it is fun trying to create a troika from a haiku written by one of the great Masters…I am sure he was not thinking this but I went with what it said to me. That`s what I like about haiku…many read what we write and see something else and that`s okay. It reminds me of my aunt`s comment when we try to interpret her paintings …she rarely tells someone what she was thinking when she was creating her artwork. She says if it speaks to you in different words, that`s okay. One series she was doing genesis and I saw only genitalia…told her it would be great for a sex ed class…lol. What makes me laugh more is she hung this series in her local church…:D
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I think she’s got the right of it … very often people read such deep thoughts in my haiku … and maybe I was thinking about something completely different 😉
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Yep, and I love it when most say…yes, that is interesting, thanks for reading 😉
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🙂 which means your comment was “off base” probably 😉 know what you mean!
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Oh, I love this…my favorite line …wrestle cozy idleness.
Such a sense of calm from this whole troiku:)
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That is my favourite “feeling” in the entire poem:) thanks!
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