trace of autumn
butterfly and bumble bee
lingering
trace of autumn
blossoms resisting
summer’s end
butterfly and bumble bee
hold a secret
the other side
lingering
season closing in
shorter days
soft breeze whistles
golden rays warm my face
life remembered
so much love
mother fed me every day
abundance overflowed
left me plenty
to feed an army
on this muddy path
I walk alone
winter calls me
© Tournesol ’15
Written for Dversepoets – Jisei – Death Poem
So well written, Oliana. I love the jisei. 🙂
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Thank you, Celestine. I was not sure how it would turn out since we wrote one already for Carpe Diem but there is always room to ponder on this, isn’t there?
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Beautiful ponderings. Sounds like your nostalgia has crept into the writing.
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the tanka was definitely thinking of the upcoming year anniversary of Mom`s passing…Dec 2 will be here sooner than I realize.
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Thanks for sharing your link with me, Cheryl-Lynn. There are many images in your troiku that suggest the ending of a life…trace of autumn, season closing, a life remembered, memories of mother. A lovely jisei. I’m glad I got to read it. I’ve never heard of a troiku, but that means nothing, I know there are many forms that I’ve never heard of…now I’m intrigued.
Gayle ~
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You are too kind, thank you! We had a jisei to do with Carpe Diem earlier, https://cheryllynnroberts.wordpress.com/2015/09/17/late-frost-jisei/ As for the troiku, I linked it to Carpe Diem’s page. Chèvrefeuille created this form. I truly enjoy Troiku and Haibun the most I think…I feel at home with these forms.
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I found Chevrefeuille’s page and remember him from a poetry group we both were members of a few years ago. So I read up on his invented form…it sounds really clever. I’ve written maybe a couple of Haibun, lots of haiku and a few tanka. I really resonate with these short forms too. When done well, they are stunning. However, a Busho, I’m not! 🙂
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I love Basho too but am enjoying women poets like Jennifer Hu and Fukuda Chiyo-Ni
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Nice. Yes, let’s make room for some women poets.
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yep, if you search Jennifer Hu, I`ve written three posts inspired by her poems which were so reasonable in e-books.
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Thanks…I’ll check her out. I appreciate that.
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Yes, this is worth pondering 🙂 Beautiful troiku and haiku…the tanka feels like it should be separate from the others (imho)
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thanks, Lynn, you are absolutely right about that tanka but I was not sure how to separate it…I may add stars in between…thanks for that! 🙂
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Oh I so remember the troiku.. I love how you have filled it with autumn.. it’s most blessed as a death poem, an I do remember that we did them in Carpe Diem.. too bad I do not have time to be there any longer…
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Thank you! I’ve missed your poems…I need to add you to my email and not just reader.
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