Tonight I walked home from work after eleven and just soaked up what I saw and stopped a few moments to take photos to capture those moments. I got to the Métro and wrote this troiku immediately before losing that feeling I had just a few moments ago. Of course these are ” Shasei” rather than haiku developped into a troiku.
Walking home
slippery streets mock
autumn leaves
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walking home
beauty swells in the light
silent night
~
slippery streets mock
I walk gingerly
catch a twilight view
~
autumn leaves mock
cold and wet – yet,
colour my world
© Tournesol ’15
Carpe Diem Haiku Writing Techniques #16 (Shiki’s) Shasei
“Though this technique is often given Shiki’s term Shasei (sketch from life) or Shajitsu (reality), it has been in use since the beginning of poetry in the Orient. The poetic principle is “to depict the thing just as it is“…He favored the quiet simplicity of just stating what he saw without anything else happening in the haiku. He found the greatest beauty in the common sight, simply reported exactly as it was seen, and ninety-nine percent of his haiku written in his style. Many people still feel he was right.”
Great shot Oliana. And your words come out beautifully. 🙂
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Thanks Celestine…I was surprised it came out so clear but the street lights surely helped.
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Very nice and the last lines of each together make a lovely verse, too.
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Thank you…I still have a pic to add but it is at the office computer.
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beautiful and thank you for the explication about the form. I’ve learned something new. 🙂
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Yes, it does not explain the Troiku but the Shasei…click on the link below and you will see a more detailed explanation as well the top menu at Carpe Diem is a description how Chèvrefeuille created the Troiku.
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Will do after work when I can focus on that. Thank you!
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walking alone
in the streetlight glow
muses join for fun
Beautifully done, Cheryl.
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Oh I love this, Janice!
sprinkling creative words
filling the ink in my pen
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Oh I think these lines are especially gorgeous –
“beauty swells in the light
silent night”
🙂
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Thanks, with the play of lights beauty did sort of expand:) I’m pleased you liked this.
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A wonderful Troiku created from a beautiful shasei haiku … your Troiku is really awesome and shows us how your experience really was … and that’s what is the meaning of shasei … describe as it was in reality …
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thanks so much, it was this troika that I reblogged on my other blog and a reader shared that same comment…she could see what I saw. That was my intention and it inspired me to write a 2200 word essay on Walking with Intention as a guest writer. I love when things go full circle like that.:)
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